June 7, 2015 by dlshughes What? More Haiku? 1 The Jasmine unfurls like the fevered dervish whose dizzy dance is prayer. 2 I’d like to think these south-bound parts portend a day of righteous molting. 3 They wouldn’t stay shut, after she passed on, so I closed her eyes again. Share this:TwitterFacebookLike this:Like Loading... Related
Part of the magic of haiku is the odd offset between precise words and open-ended imagery. Your second haiku has me speculating about “south bound parts” and their relationship with molting, righteous or otherwise. On the other hand, the third one is so vivid I can see it. thanks for these.